Wednesday, December 8, 2010
Friday, November 5, 2010
B: correcting the midterm test
“Old Habits Die Hard” has very distinct literary style compared to other love stories. There have been so many stories, movies and books about love that we can now wonder if it is still relevant in stories as a theme. The theme of “Old Habits Die Hard”, is love, the love that a care giver gives to the person she loves, who is sick. This particular situation is relevant because it can apply to all sorts of other lovers, and people feel concerned by the strength of this love story.
First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader understand what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, because most people are not used to living that kind of situation. At a young age, it’s uncommon to have to spend all your time and energy taking care of your loved one, without expecting anything in return. For example, in the quote : “Old woman stays behind. She feeds him potatoes, eggs, milk through a straw. She talks to him. He cannot answer. She tells him things, answers for him.”, we can see the effort that the old woman puts into her husband’s desperate state. Moreover, love is universal, that’s why the young audience can also recognize the love behind the old woman’s everyday actions, even though they don’t express their feelings the same way as implied in the story.
First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader understand what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, because most people are not used to living that kind of situation. At a young age, it’s uncommon to have to spend all your time and energy taking care of your loved one, without expecting anything in return. For example, in the quote : “Old woman stays behind. She feeds him potatoes, eggs, milk through a straw. She talks to him. He cannot answer. She tells him things, answers for him.”, we can see the effort that the old woman puts into her husband’s desperate state. Moreover, love is universal, that’s why the young audience can also recognize the love behind the old woman’s everyday actions, even though they don’t express their feelings the same way as implied in the story.
Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories. Of course, the theme of love has been explained in every way that it could possibly be. For example, people still talk about Romeo and Juliet, Tristan and Isolde, Bonnie and Clyde, etc. Love is still present in our everyday life as much as it was in our ancestors’. Although love is timeless, it has taken a different form with our generation. In the story, the woman stays with her husband until the end no matter what. Nowadays, love can be as sincere, but it is less likely that couples stay together as long as mentioned in the text. Divorce is more and more common. Therefore, even if our perception of love has changed, it will always be present in our lives.
Thridly, love is a feeling that we associate to something strong and beautiful. Despite the fact that the old man is battling for his life and is described as having no control on himself. The love between the woman and the old man is strong enough to make this story beautiful, even though the context isn’t. The next quote describes perfectly this situation: “ He’ll shit, piss on the floor, run around like a madmen bedlamite [...] She kisses old man. Water in his eyes.” The persistence of love in the story makes us forget about the drama lying upon the characters. This shows how strong the emotion of love is and how we end up seeing a beautiful side to each love story.
In conclusion, love is a timeless theme that touches everyone because of its power to convey strong and beautiful emotions to the audience . We could also probably ask ourselves where did this fascination for love came from?
A. Self-evaluation of Midterm test
My purpose in writing the text is ... showing the relevance of the the me of he story in taht specific context.
I use this type of introduction: (ex. question) an interesting fact
This is a suggestion for improving the introduction or having a more effective one: Be more specific and less general.
In paragraph 1, the thesis statement or the main idea of the text.is ..." The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. "
This is a suggestion for improving the thesis statement or having a more effective one: the thesis statement is ok but it doesn't particularly has to do with "Old Habits Die Hard". To be improved, the thesis satement should concern the relevance of love in the context of the story.
The topic sentence in -
paragragh 2 is ... "First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages."
paragragh 3 is ... "Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories."
paragraph 4 is ... "Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful."
The supporting points (paraphrased) I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... Even though the characters of the story are old, we can still feel the love the woman is givieng ger husband by all her everyday actions, and understand whats she is going through. And also the fact that younger readers can also understand love expressed in different situations
paragragh 3 are ... Although love has been explained in alot of ways, it's still present in our everyday life, and that's why we like the theme of love in art.
paragraph 4 are ...
I can add more detail in -
paragragh 2 ... by giving examples and quotes of the story where it showes that love is a universal subject
paragragh 3 ... by linking my idea to the story .
paragraph 4 ...by giving examples of what does love in the story teachesus and what lesson there is to be learn in that particular story.
The transitional words or phrases I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... First of all, for example , even though, moreover.
paragragh 3 are ... Secondly, of course.
paragraph 4 are ... Also.
The coordinating or subordinating expressions I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... Because.
paragragh 3 are ... Because, in order to.
paragraph 4 are ...Because.
Here is my suggestion for improving the conclusion: rephrase my main point and be talk more about things in the story.
I could improve the content of the text by ... Giving examples, quotes, supporting point linked to the relevance of the particular situation explained in the story.
I could improve the organization of the text by ... Being more coherent and using more coordination and subordination
I could improve the development of the text by ... Supporting my ideas with more point and examples, that way, my points would get accross easily.
I could improve the sentence style of the text by..
varying the kind of senteces i use,
I could improve the vocabulary by ... (give five examples) varying the words I use, use more transitionnal words, and use a more specific vocabulary that applies more to the subject.
I could improve the grammar by ... (give five examples) There are alot of aspects I could improve, but in grammar I got 10 on 10 and i did not find any grammar mistakes in my text. But I could make sure my sentences are not too long nd redundant.
I could improve the spelling by ... (give three-five examples) Varying the pronuns I use and making sure the words are spelled the right way.
What I liked most about my first text is... the universality of the point that I brought up, and the fact I talked about the relevance of love in society today.
What I liked least about my first text is... that I didn't really give quotes from the story and my supporting points were weak because they weren't really linked to story itself .
I use this type of introduction: (ex. question) an interesting fact
This is a suggestion for improving the introduction or having a more effective one: Be more specific and less general.
In paragraph 1, the thesis statement or the main idea of the text.is ..." The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. "
This is a suggestion for improving the thesis statement or having a more effective one: the thesis statement is ok but it doesn't particularly has to do with "Old Habits Die Hard". To be improved, the thesis satement should concern the relevance of love in the context of the story.
The topic sentence in -
paragragh 2 is ... "First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages."
paragragh 3 is ... "Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories."
paragraph 4 is ... "Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful."
The supporting points (paraphrased) I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... Even though the characters of the story are old, we can still feel the love the woman is givieng ger husband by all her everyday actions, and understand whats she is going through. And also the fact that younger readers can also understand love expressed in different situations
paragragh 3 are ... Although love has been explained in alot of ways, it's still present in our everyday life, and that's why we like the theme of love in art.
paragraph 4 are ...
I can add more detail in -
paragragh 2 ... by giving examples and quotes of the story where it showes that love is a universal subject
paragragh 3 ... by linking my idea to the story .
paragraph 4 ...by giving examples of what does love in the story teachesus and what lesson there is to be learn in that particular story.
The transitional words or phrases I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... First of all, for example , even though, moreover.
paragragh 3 are ... Secondly, of course.
paragraph 4 are ... Also.
The coordinating or subordinating expressions I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... Because.
paragragh 3 are ... Because, in order to.
paragraph 4 are ...Because.
Here is my suggestion for improving the conclusion: rephrase my main point and be talk more about things in the story.
I could improve the content of the text by ... Giving examples, quotes, supporting point linked to the relevance of the particular situation explained in the story.
I could improve the organization of the text by ... Being more coherent and using more coordination and subordination
I could improve the development of the text by ... Supporting my ideas with more point and examples, that way, my points would get accross easily.
I could improve the sentence style of the text by..
varying the kind of senteces i use,
I could improve the vocabulary by ... (give five examples) varying the words I use, use more transitionnal words, and use a more specific vocabulary that applies more to the subject.
I could improve the grammar by ... (give five examples) There are alot of aspects I could improve, but in grammar I got 10 on 10 and i did not find any grammar mistakes in my text. But I could make sure my sentences are not too long nd redundant.
I could improve the spelling by ... (give three-five examples) Varying the pronuns I use and making sure the words are spelled the right way.
What I liked most about my first text is... the universality of the point that I brought up, and the fact I talked about the relevance of love in society today.
What I liked least about my first text is... that I didn't really give quotes from the story and my supporting points were weak because they weren't really linked to story itself .
Wednesday, October 6, 2010
Wednesday, August 25, 2010
Stephanie's profile
When I entered the room, I noticed her right away. I don't know why, maybe because she looked like an anglophone to me, and she looked like she belonged in this 103 english class. In fact, it is the second time Stephanie is taking this course, so it's not hard to believe that one of her short-term goals is to pass this course. She also wants to make new friends in cegep, and eventually graduate. Stephanie told me it was quite time she got her driver's license and she'd be interested in learning to play piano. If she's thinking more about long-term goals, it would be to get into university and have a family.
One of the achievement she's the most proud of is the charity event she raised alot of money for. Stephanie is a really sociable person and she particularly likes music, movies, shoes and clothes. Traveling, drawing, eating and hanging out with friends are some of her other interests. Even though she doesn't play any sports, she really likes to workout.
I also have to mention that Stephanie has friends and family in Israel, USA and in the UK. She admitted to me that one her most prominent skill was being good at bringing people together. I was left with the impression that she was a really nice person and a good talker.
One of the achievement she's the most proud of is the charity event she raised alot of money for. Stephanie is a really sociable person and she particularly likes music, movies, shoes and clothes. Traveling, drawing, eating and hanging out with friends are some of her other interests. Even though she doesn't play any sports, she really likes to workout.
I also have to mention that Stephanie has friends and family in Israel, USA and in the UK. She admitted to me that one her most prominent skill was being good at bringing people together. I was left with the impression that she was a really nice person and a good talker.
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