Close Reading # 1 to 6 1. a) first person and third person b) first person and third person c) third person 4/4 2. b) “Bread” 4/4 3. c) “ Old Habits Die Hard” 4/4 4. The narrator does not put us in the situation, and we don’t know precisely what the context of the story is. The short sentences set a more formal tone to the story. The narrator is not talking to the reader in particular. 1/4 5. b) “Bread”, the author makes us imagine what it would be like to be in situations where food is not a certainty. This story has more impact if the reader always has access to food on a regular basis. 3/4 6. a) “Old Habits Die Hard” b) “Bread” c) “The New Food” d) “Old Habits Die Hard” e) “The New Food” f) “Bread” 0/4 Figurative Devices #1 and 3 1. Because “The New Food” is an invention that would change the food system and be an advancement in technology. 1/4 3. Because this story makes us imagine all sorts of different situations and is full of ways of making our minds realise what a piece of bread represent in another perspective. 2/4 Syntax #2 and 3 2. The three subjects of these stories were really serious and meaningful. This crude style was matching the very simple descriptions of the characters. In the situations depicted, only the bare minimum was able to have a big impact on the reader. Keeping it simple was the key to getting the right message across. 1/4 3. Even though, the relationship is not well explained, we can feel that the woman loves the old men very much. She has an unconditional love for him and she shows it in her everyday actions. 3/4 23/40
Essay “Old Habits Die Hard” “Old Habits Die Hard” has very distinct literary style compared to other love stories. There have been so many stories, movies and books about love that we can now wonder if it is still relevant today as a theme. The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. Different aspects of the story show the relevance of its theme. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader believe in what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, he could understand the meaning of the love the character is giving to her husband in her ordinary everyday actions. Moreover, love is something that can be expressed in many different kinds of situations, not only between lovers. This explains why younger readers could not only appreciate this story but also understand the theme and the message of it. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories. Of course, the theme of love has been explained in every way that it could possibly be, but there are still new aspects that authors and filmmakers find in order to make us still want to understand love in a different way. Love is still present in our everyday life as much as it was in our ancestors’. That’s why we feel there is a special importance to love and love themed art. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful. Love is still a relevant theme in modern stories, because it still has the power to teach us something. What makes love an important theme is that even now, in our modern society, it still can teach us lessons and make us see life differently. There is always something hidden behind a love story, and it changes when the context is different. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. In conclusion, love is a timeless theme that can still teach us something today. We could also probably ask ourselves where did this fascination for love came from? In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. (397 words) Content: 15/20 Coherence: 15/20 Style and Syntax: 15/20 Total 45/60 Vocabulary: 15/20 Grammar: 7/10 Spelling & punct.: 7/10 Total: 29/40 74% = 29,6/40 23 + 29,6 = 52,6/80
Essay “Old Habits Die Hard” “Old Habits Die Hard” has very distinct literary style compared to other love stories. There have been so many stories, movies and books about love that we can now wonder if it is still relevant today as a theme. The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. Different aspects of the story show the relevance of its theme. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader believe in what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, he could understand the meaning of the love the character is giving to her husband in her ordinary everyday actions. Moreover, love is something that can be expressed in many different kinds of situations, not only between lovers. This explains why younger readers could not only appreciate this story but also understand the theme and the message of it. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories. Of course, the theme of love has been explained in every way that it could possibly be, but there are still new aspects that authors and filmmakers find in order to make us still want to understand love in a different way. Love is still present in our everyday life as much as it was in our ancestors’. That’s why we feel there is a special importance to love and love themed art. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful. Love is still a relevant theme in modern stories, because it still has the power to teach us something. What makes love an important theme is that even now, in our modern society, it still can teach us lessons and make us see life differently. There is always something hidden behind a love story, and it changes when the context is different. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. In conclusion, love is a timeless theme that can still teach us something today. We could also probably ask ourselves where did this fascination for love came from? In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text. In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text. (397 words) Content: 15/20 Coherence: 15/20 Style and Syntax: 15/20 Total 45/60 Vocabulary: 15/20 Grammar: 7/10 Spelling & punct.: 7/10 Total: 29/40 74% = 29,6/40 23 + 29,6 = 52,6/80
The official correction October 6th 2010 Ariane Beauregard
Close Reading # 1 to 6 1. a) first person and third person b) first person and third person c) third person 4/4 2. b) “Bread” 4/4 3. c) “ Old Habits Die Hard” 4/4 4. The narrator does not put us in the situation, and we don’t know precisely what the context of the story is. The short sentences set a more formal tone to the story. The narrator is not talking to the reader in particular. 1/4 5. b) “Bread”, the author makes us imagine what it would be like to be in situations where food is not a certainty. This story has more impact if the reader always has access to food on a regular basis. 3/4 6. a) “Old Habits Die Hard” b) “Bread” c) “The New Food” d) “Old Habits Die Hard” e) “The New Food” f) “Bread” 0/4 Figurative Devices #1 and 3 1. Because “The New Food” is an invention that would change the food system and be an advancement in technology. 1/4 3. Because this story makes us imagine all sorts of different situations and is full of ways of making our minds realise what a piece of bread represent in another perspective. 2/4 Syntax #2 and 3 2. The three subjects of these stories were really serious and meaningful. This crude style was matching the very simple descriptions of the characters. In the situations depicted, only the bare minimum was able to have a big impact on the reader. Keeping it simple was the key to getting the right message across. 1/4 3. Even though, the relationship is not well explained, we can feel that the woman loves the old men very much. She has an unconditional love for him and she shows it in her everyday actions. 3/4 23/40
Essay “Old Habits Die Hard” “Old Habits Die Hard” has very distinct literary style compared to other love stories. There have been so many stories, movies and books about love that we can now wonder if it is still relevant today as a theme. The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. Different aspects of the story show the relevance of its theme. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2,3,4 would improve your text. First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader believe in what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, he could understand the meaning of the love the character is giving to her husband in her ordinary everyday actions. Moreover, love is something that can be expressed in many different kinds of situations, not only between lovers. This explains why younger readers could not only appreciate this story but also understand the theme and the message of it.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2, 3, 4, 6 would improve your text. Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories. Of course, the theme of love has been explained in every way that it could possibly be, but there are still new aspects that authors and filmmakers find in order to make us still want to understand love in a different way. Love is still present in our everyday life as much as it was in our ancestors’. That’s why we feel there is a special importance to love and love themed art. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2,3,4,6 would improve your text. Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful. Love is still a relevant theme in modern stories, because it still has the power to teach us something. What makes love an important theme is that even now, in our modern society, it still can teach us lessons and make us see life differently. There is always something hidden behind a love story, and it changes when the context is different. In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2, 3, 4, 6 would improve your text. In conclusion, love is a timeless theme that can still teach us something today. We could also probably ask ourselves where did this fascination for love came from? Though everyting you say is true and well put, it was not what you had to discuss. You had to demonstrate that the story told in "Old Habits Die Hard", two elderly people, on sick the other one a care giver, that particular situation is relevant. (397 words) Content: 12/20 Coherence: 12/20 Style and Syntax: 15/20 Total 39/60 Vocabulary: 15/20 Grammar: 10/10 Spelling & punct.: 10/10 Total: 35/40 74% = 29,6/40 23 + 29,6 = 52,6/80
October 6th 2010 Ariane Beauregard
ReplyDeleteClose Reading
# 1 to 6
1. a) first person and third person
b) first person and third person
c) third person 4/4
2. b) “Bread” 4/4
3. c) “ Old Habits Die Hard” 4/4
4. The narrator does not put us in the situation, and we don’t know precisely what the context of the story is. The short sentences set a more formal tone to the story. The narrator is not talking to the reader in particular. 1/4
5. b) “Bread”, the author makes us imagine what it would be like to be in situations where food is not a certainty. This story has more impact if the reader always has access to food on a regular basis. 3/4
6. a) “Old Habits Die Hard” b) “Bread” c) “The New Food” d) “Old Habits Die Hard” e) “The New Food” f) “Bread” 0/4
Figurative Devices
#1 and 3
1. Because “The New Food” is an invention that would change the food system and be an advancement in technology. 1/4
3. Because this story makes us imagine all sorts of different situations and is full of ways of making our minds realise what a piece of bread represent in another perspective. 2/4
Syntax
#2 and 3
2. The three subjects of these stories were really serious and meaningful. This crude style was matching the very simple descriptions of the characters. In the situations depicted, only the bare minimum was able to have a big impact on the reader. Keeping it simple was the key to getting the right message across. 1/4
3. Even though, the relationship is not well explained, we can feel that the woman loves the old men very much. She has an unconditional love for him and she shows it in her everyday actions. 3/4
23/40
Essay “Old Habits Die Hard”
ReplyDelete“Old Habits Die Hard” has very distinct literary style compared to other love stories. There have been so many stories, movies and books about love that we can now wonder if it is still relevant today as a theme. The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. Different aspects of the story show the relevance of its theme.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader believe in what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, he could understand the meaning of the love the character is giving to her husband in her ordinary everyday actions. Moreover, love is something that can be expressed in many different kinds of situations, not only between lovers. This explains why younger readers could not only appreciate this story but also understand the theme and the message of it.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories. Of course, the theme of love has been explained in every way that it could possibly be, but there are still new aspects that authors and filmmakers find in order to make us still want to understand love in a different way. Love is still present in our everyday life as much as it was in our ancestors’. That’s why we feel there is a special importance to love and love themed art.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful. Love is still a relevant theme in modern stories, because it still has the power to teach us something. What makes love an important theme is that even now, in our modern society, it still can teach us lessons and make us see life differently. There is always something hidden behind a love story, and it changes when the context is different.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In conclusion, love is a timeless theme that can still teach us something today. We could also probably ask ourselves where did this fascination for love came from?
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
(397 words)
Content: 15/20
Coherence: 15/20
Style and Syntax: 15/20
Total 45/60
Vocabulary: 15/20
Grammar: 7/10
Spelling & punct.: 7/10
Total: 29/40
74% = 29,6/40
23 + 29,6 = 52,6/80
Essay “Old Habits Die Hard”
ReplyDelete“Old Habits Die Hard” has very distinct literary style compared to other love stories. There have been so many stories, movies and books about love that we can now wonder if it is still relevant today as a theme. The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. Different aspects of the story show the relevance of its theme.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader believe in what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, he could understand the meaning of the love the character is giving to her husband in her ordinary everyday actions. Moreover, love is something that can be expressed in many different kinds of situations, not only between lovers. This explains why younger readers could not only appreciate this story but also understand the theme and the message of it.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
Secondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories. Of course, the theme of love has been explained in every way that it could possibly be, but there are still new aspects that authors and filmmakers find in order to make us still want to understand love in a different way. Love is still present in our everyday life as much as it was in our ancestors’. That’s why we feel there is a special importance to love and love themed art.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful. Love is still a relevant theme in modern stories, because it still has the power to teach us something. What makes love an important theme is that even now, in our modern society, it still can teach us lessons and make us see life differently. There is always something hidden behind a love story, and it changes when the context is different.
ReplyDeleteIn this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In conclusion, love is a timeless theme that can still teach us something today. We could also probably ask ourselves where did this fascination for love came from?
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: would improve your text.
In this paragraph concerning grammar, vocabulary, punctuation, and spelling, working on the followings: would improve your text.
(397 words)
Content: 15/20
Coherence: 15/20
Style and Syntax: 15/20
Total 45/60
Vocabulary: 15/20
Grammar: 7/10
Spelling & punct.: 7/10
Total: 29/40
74% = 29,6/40
23 + 29,6 = 52,6/80
The official correction
ReplyDeleteOctober 6th 2010 Ariane Beauregard
Close Reading
# 1 to 6
1. a) first person and third person
b) first person and third person
c) third person 4/4
2. b) “Bread” 4/4
3. c) “ Old Habits Die Hard” 4/4
4. The narrator does not put us in the situation, and we don’t know precisely what the context of the story is. The short sentences set a more formal tone to the story. The narrator is not talking to the reader in particular. 1/4
5. b) “Bread”, the author makes us imagine what it would be like to be in situations where food is not a certainty. This story has more impact if the reader always has access to food on a regular basis. 3/4
6. a) “Old Habits Die Hard” b) “Bread” c) “The New Food” d) “Old Habits Die Hard” e) “The New Food” f) “Bread” 0/4
Figurative Devices
#1 and 3
1. Because “The New Food” is an invention that would change the food system and be an advancement in technology. 1/4
3. Because this story makes us imagine all sorts of different situations and is full of ways of making our minds realise what a piece of bread represent in another perspective. 2/4
Syntax
#2 and 3
2. The three subjects of these stories were really serious and meaningful. This crude style was matching the very simple descriptions of the characters. In the situations depicted, only the bare minimum was able to have a big impact on the reader. Keeping it simple was the key to getting the right message across. 1/4
3. Even though, the relationship is not well explained, we can feel that the woman loves the old men very much. She has an unconditional love for him and she shows it in her everyday actions. 3/4
23/40
Essay “Old Habits Die Hard”
ReplyDelete“Old Habits Die Hard” has very distinct literary style compared to other love stories. There have been so many stories, movies and books about love that we can now wonder if it is still relevant today as a theme. The theme of love will be a relevant theme throughout history because people will always feel concerned when it comes down to love stories. Different aspects of the story show the relevance of its theme.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2,3,4 would improve your text.
First of all, love is a relevant theme because it touches people of all ages. For example, in “Old Habits Die Hard” the main characters are of old age, but the theme still has the power to touch us and make the reader believe in what the woman has to go through. Even though a young reader wouldn’t relate with the old woman’s situation, he could understand the meaning of the love the character is giving to her husband in her ordinary everyday actions. Moreover, love is something that can be expressed in many different kinds of situations, not only between lovers. This explains why younger readers could not only appreciate this story but also understand the theme and the message of it.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2, 3, 4, 6 would improve your text.
ReplyDeleteSecondly, love is timeless and that makes it a relevant theme even today, because people still feel concerned when it comes to love stories. Of course, the theme of love has been explained in every way that it could possibly be, but there are still new aspects that authors and filmmakers find in order to make us still want to understand love in a different way. Love is still present in our everyday life as much as it was in our ancestors’. That’s why we feel there is a special importance to love and love themed art.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2,3,4,6 would improve your text.
Also, love is a feeling that we attach to something strong and beautiful. Love is still a relevant theme in modern stories, because it still has the power to teach us something. What makes love an important theme is that even now, in our modern society, it still can teach us lessons and make us see life differently. There is always something hidden behind a love story, and it changes when the context is different.
In this paragraph concerning content, organization, development and style, working on the followings: 2, 3, 4, 6 would improve your text.
In conclusion, love is a timeless theme that can still teach us something today. We could also probably ask ourselves where did this fascination for love came from?
Though everyting you say is true and well put, it was not what you had to discuss.
You had to demonstrate that the story told in "Old Habits Die Hard", two elderly people, on sick the other one a care giver, that particular situation is relevant.
(397 words)
Content: 12/20
Coherence: 12/20
Style and Syntax: 15/20
Total 39/60
Vocabulary: 15/20
Grammar: 10/10
Spelling & punct.: 10/10
Total: 35/40
74% = 29,6/40
23 + 29,6 = 52,6/80